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Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 5: Event Flags
Offline 06-08-2017, 02:38 PM (This reply was last modified: 06-08-2017 03:52 PM by cynicalAutomaton.)(Edited by cynicalAutomaton.)
Reply: #81
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 1 : Late to the Party
SuzyLisa: Carefully do a YOUTH JUMP out of the window. Or not carefully, really.

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You exercise as much caution one can when jumping out a window and get a running start.

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Flawless execution.

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Offline 06-08-2017, 03:07 PM
Reply: #82
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 1 : Late to the Party
I believe it's Lisa? ;u;

> Lisa: Now land already.

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Offline 06-08-2017, 03:51 PM (This reply was last modified: 06-08-2017 04:22 PM by cynicalAutomaton.)(Edited by cynicalAutomaton.)
Reply: #83
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 1 : Late to the Party
I believe it's Lisa? ;u;
Lisa: Now land already.

You land in a super dramatic fashion. It's got a tuck and roll and everything. Clay applauds you from the background. You get up, but don't bother dusting yourself off. You'll be outside for the foreseeable future, and a good explorer can't be afraid to get dirty.

You saunter over to your friends, rounding out the obligatory four-person team.

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LISA FURLONG joins the party!

Wow, apart from being late, everyone showed up with less fuss than what was kinda expected. Now that the minimum four person requirement has been met, the game can begin!

End of Chapter
To be Continued in...
Chapter II ~ Gameplay Pedantics



A/N: welp. that's that. here's where I pause the story like a douche for my own selfish purposes and ask for feedback

gimme

good and bad i want all of it

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Offline 06-08-2017, 07:59 PM (This reply was last modified: 06-08-2017 07:59 PM by dognose.)(Edited by dognose.)
Reply: #84
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 1 : Late to the Party
personally i think the best positive aspect of this fanadventure is the art, it is truly great and it is very clear that you've spent time on it. the dialogue is also great in some scenes and some of the characters are really interesting and i like their designs. pretty quick pace, which isn't bad! all in all, probably my favorite fanadventure on msparp, ever. good job.

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Offline 06-09-2017, 03:57 AM
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RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 1 : Late to the Party
thank you! pacing is actually something i want to work on in the future

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Offline 06-09-2017, 06:17 AM
Reply: #86
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Intermission 1 : [CA]n't Stop Won't Stop
(06-08-2017 07:59 PM)dognose Wrote:  personally i think the best positive aspect of this fanadventure is the art, it is truly great and it is very clear that you've spent time on it.

I think I'm in total agreeance with this, and by think I mean know. It's beautiful. But the characters are also amazing and I love the premise and I can't wait to see how the game gets involved! It's that frustrating feeling where I want more at this very second, and I think it's a good thing that you've achieved that.

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Offline 06-09-2017, 12:21 PM
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RE: Sburbia Online ~ Intermission 1 : [CA]n't Stop Won't Stop
dang man I relate to that feeling. honestly though it feels good being the one dishing it out

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Offline 06-09-2017, 01:34 PM
Reply: #88
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Intermission 1 : [CA]n't Stop Won't Stop
Hey at least its homestuck related unlike mine
Speaking of

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Offline 06-11-2017, 06:40 AM (This reply was last modified: 09-13-2017 10:30 AM by cynicalAutomaton.)(Edited by cynicalAutomaton.)
Reply: #89
RE: Sburbia Online ~ Intermission 1 : [CA]n't Stop Won't Stop

Chapter 2.

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Offline 06-11-2017, 07:53 AM
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RE: Sburbia Online ~ Chapter 2 : Gameplay Pedantics
>Jack: Help Kate assign her trowel to her strife specibus.

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